(1) I decided to replace the big boring block of explanatory text about the various spacefaring races with 'letting the reader figure it out by reading the damn story'.
(2) I decided to replace the big boring block of explanatory text about the crew of the Cupid's Lock with introducing each of them as they showed up through their actions.
(3) The whole middle of the chapter made no sense whatsoever, so I had to totally rearrange the sequence of events.
(4) The first version of the 'historical simulation' was really, really boring. Basically, I decided to have it be a simulation of a filmstrip, because I thought that was an amusing image. Except that it actually needed to get information across, which made it about as interesting as watching a filmstrip.
Er, right. Anyway, it's not really a story in its own right like the first chapter, but stuff happens and it ends on a cliffhanger.
Chapter 2: http://home.earthlink.net/~aaronm1/text/spaceotters2.html
(and in case you didn't read it)
Chapter 1: http://home.earthlink.net/~aaronm1/text/spaceotters.html